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This has seemed like a really, really short sabbatical and she sure has jumped right back into tweeting every five seconds, hasn't she. So basically she learned nothing from this "break". 

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Why is she pinning all this wedding stuff? The girl is obsessed with finding a husband. That is what she needs to take a sabbatical from. She needs to spend at least six months not constantly obsessing over guys/weddings/kissing/marriage.  

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Off topic, but speaking of terrible writing practices, I was once hate reading Stephanie Meyer's advice for writers, and she said when you finish your rough draft you should get someone to read it if you're brave before sending it off to the publisher... :doh:

Funny - I was just thinking that Xaquerie sounded like the name of a soft porn vampire. :pb_smile:  So I guess Raquel and Stephanie have something in common then. 

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Looks like the reason she is behind is that she hasn't updated her wordcount in four or five days. Huh. Wonder if the end of the sabbatical distracted her.

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We got a couple of lines from her novel. 

From the prologue:

Remember your commitment.  To protect and serve.”
“You trying to appeal to my guilty conscience, Bowen?”
“Is it guilty?”
A heavy silence ensued between the two angry men, both in police officer uniforms.  
“Imagine all the money we can get from this, Bowen.”
“No.  We’re not in it for the cash.  We’re in it to put an end to this - to protect this city!  You’re letting greed get in the way of - ”
A fist caught Bowen in the jaw and he stumbled backwards in surprise.
“Don’t!  You may be my partner but you’re not my boss.  I can make my own decisions and if this is what I choose to do, then not you or anybody else can stop me.”
 
From the first chapter:
 
I absent-mindedly stirred the spoonful of honey into the hot tea, my eyes lingering on the new frame I had hung on the wall of my studio apartment.  I had worked hard to become a professional journalist, and now I, Fathom Brooks, was proud to display my degree
 
One of her characters is based off a real person. Xaqurie is a boss, legit and "attractive" she likes writing him best. 
 
She has been using a thesaurus a lot and had to look up another word for passionate, which was interesting. 
 
She listens to music while writing because it makes her look cooler.
 
This is from the seventh page, the 7th line and seven sentences:
 
Well???  How did it go?
A smile crept to my lips.  I couldn’t wait to tell her how my morning had gone so far.
“So!” Mr. Donnell began.  
I jumped a little at his enthusiastic outburst.
“Take a seat, Miss Brooks.”  He waved a hand to a plush-looking chair in front of his huge oak desk.
I sat, my duffel bag on my lap again.
“What did you bring me?” he asked, motioning to it.  He leaned against his desk, directly in front of me.
 
 
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I absent-mindedly stirred the spoonful of honey into the hot tea, my eyes lingering on the new frame I had hung on the wall of my studio apartment.  I had worked hard to become a professional journalist, and now I, Fathom Brooks, was proud to display my degree
 

What, does Miss Fathom's college not give them their degree until they get jobs as professional journalists?

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So she's blogging about writing, but not actually writing anything?

It is funny that she posts a blog saying she denies herself sleep until she writes when it's been five days since she's updated her count...

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Just based on the above tidbit.

abuse of ! (save !!, free !!!)

ly words (which I consider to be lazy)

passive voice.

The 'I, Fathom Brooks, bit made me heave a wee bit (because there are other ways to tell the reader who the first person narrator is, I've done it)

Raquel - put the thesaurus down and write (because really, dear, you need to aim at a low reading level and lexical index - and I'm not kidding).  

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Raquel - thank you, you are probably a spark for a really interesting yet twisted character (infancy stage here folks, I have to work with them for a while to see where they are going to go).  (translation - I'll be 'stalking' her for a while.

So the ex bf likes to retweet sext crap?  I got an ick vibe or something.  (But thin she pings the 'child, please' button).

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 It would have been fairly easy just to quote the framed degree on the wall where it says her name.

It's her fantasy self, the one who worked hard to get a degree and become a professional writer.

 

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This from the girl who claims she isn't called to go to college (twitter)

I'm not called to work 40-50 hours a week, but I am called to eat.

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I have a feeling Raquel would get a bunch of new callings real quick if her parents stopped being called to pay her bills.  

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According to her Twitter she has totally taken a novel writing class and her current novel is going great. Thinking back, I think at one point she might have taken a homeschool writing workshop. She also doesn't think physical abuse is grounds for divorce. 

Because skimming something while on my phone often means I didn't read correctly. Sorry folks. 

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Honestly, if she does make her 50K, or even half that much, I'll be really happy for her. There's something to be said for accomplishing that much, even if you ultimately did a crappy job. She obviously wants to write, and if there's ever going to be any hope of her improving her skills or expanding her mind (ha!), these are the steps she has to take.

If she would loosen up a bit more she could probably do well writing teen paranormal romance. The bar's not exactly high, and they just love dysfunctional relationships in that genre...

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Raquel really, really wants to write and I will give her credit for sticking with it for years and years. Shoobydoo is right, she probably could get published if she wrote a teen romance. Names like Xaquarie and her warped view of romance would fit in there. 

I sometimes like reading shitty YA books and I have read some that are way worse than what Raquel writes. 

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Raquel kicked a dog.

http://www.itsjustraquel.com/

I love #23:

"You need to get out of your comfort zone, start hanging out with the right people, and maybe then you'll get ambition for real dreams and goals instead of being so lukewarm and stuck in your own little world right now."

IKR? Aren't those people the worst, Raquel?

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